析经济学人，习高分作文/20

做学生就多考分，做成人就多挣钱，这样尊严才可以多一点。

——我离托福考试只剩06天。

周日早上好，时日不多，始终孤寂，自己反而越来越心安，因为看的长远一点，未来是由许多选择组成，不必在一个地方孤掷一注。

昨晚深夜不眠，干脆起床整理了些必备句型，然后参考着写了篇独立作文，今天一并其他满发作文，发过来评析一下吧。

TPO 09

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

当时算是随机找到一篇文章，也没做过，初看时没怎么细想，做题时在纸上列下三点：资源、工具和名师。真正写作时，觉得一方面时间紧就很有压力，另一方面脑子里真是空白，那么多句型也不熟练就想不起来了，而看着句型能理解想几个句子，因为架构已经出来了，自己有想表达的意思，于是句子的血肉——动词副词名词也就可以填充进去了。

习作/良辰美

Gone are the days when children could only read paper books and be exposed to their classmates and theInternet are here to stay, with which,the young nowadays could dive into the e-books and almost be linked to everyoneall over the world through the cellphones or computers. Therefore, opinions are divided as to whether kids are less creative than they were in the past with the advancement oftechnology. From my perspective, they are much more innovative than any momentthroughout the history thanks to the popularity of those smart gadgets. Reasons for my point of view abound, butthree of them stand out: the wealth of information, plenty of tools andamounts of experts. 

 

Start with the abundant resources. Undoubtedly, the search engines give an edge to the students so that they canget anything they want to know at ease, including the theories and books. Takeme as an example, whenever I find the books available in the book store are tooexpensive, I would type the keywords of the author and pages of related information would pop up.Then I just click several buttons and the e-books are downloaded into my phone.After I finish reading these books, I could learn more than before very fastand create something great based on others' ideas. Just as it is so easy to acquire mountains of books, so it would be not too hard toobtain other useful materials. 

 

Next comes the role of delicate tools.Recently, many soft wares are invented for us to make videos and music.Besides, it is getting easier to watch and listen to enjoy these wonderfulthings. For one thing, we could enjoy ourselves after a long day's tedious workand have a better study or work effenciency（efficiency）. For another, these soft wares help us improve the speed todeal with repeating steps and focus more on the creative fronts. 

 

Finally, the experts. When weencounter some obstacles, in the past never could we convinently（conveniently） ask the ones with many experiences in thefield. Further, creative thoughts often come to our minds during thediscussions. So no matter for kids or adults, both could increase the chance ofsuccess to promote the innovation.

 

Even though supporters of those who believe technology do great harm to the development of adlolencents（adolescents）and they may indulge themselves into theelectronic games, I am still very oppostmistic（optimistic）that it could be counted as a way to train these kids to learnothers’creative masterpieces. All in all, Imaintain that technology does not putthe children on a slippery slope in innovation, instead, it breathes more fresh air into them.

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Aug 18th 2018 | Technology | 445 words

全篇首段四句话，两句介绍背景和主题，两句说明观点和原因。主体段三部分，末段有让步有总结，那么长其实就两句话。我觉得还是要多练，句型要在写作中才能熟记，口语听力阅读也是一样，形成条件反射。最后几分钟能打出来一百多字，但是个别单词拼写错误一时也纠正不过来，同义词替换也没时间细想就只能重复用词，没有检查一遍就肯定有细微语法错误和笔误，这就是有限条件下的最佳结果吧。

可恨距离考试时日无多，或者说本就决心不强效率不高，这个阶段只能达到这种程度了。

习作/ XX

As we all know, technology has improved greatly than before, hence it had totally changed our life, because it provides us more opportunities to receive different information and experience new things on the internet and so on. In this way, some parents attach greater importance to teach their children with the help of technology. However, some people claim that technology made their children less creative than they were in the past. Instead, I hold an opposite statement. 

To start with, I believe children are able to learn more on the Internet than before so that they are more creative than we were in the past. For one thing, young people can attend many art lessons online, thus learning how to appreciate the beauty, and improve the sense of aesthesis. Besides, they are able to appreciate many masterpieces on the Internet so that they are much likely to improve the ability of imagination and creation. Take myself as an example, once I joined in an online painting class, and my teacher always asked us to appreciate some painting of some greatest artists. Finally, I started to create my own painting with much imagination. For another, teenagers are able to communicate with some noble artists by using some social media so that they can directly gain the knowledge and experience from these celebrities. Under this circumstance, they will be more creative too. Therefore, there are every reasons to believe that Technology will help the young people to be more creative than before. 

Additionally, using high-tech equipment also allow teenagers to put their envision into reality much easier than before. To be more specific, we can easily put our works into the social media, such as posting our photographs on the Facebook. In this way, young people can easily show their works online, while other people will have their own comments for their works. Consequently, these teenagers are likely to gradually keep the pace with the fashion trend. For example, I always posted my painting on Weibo, so everyone who had saw them would make comments for my works. As a result, I kept working harder and harder, and finally created some innovative paintings, and most of people like them. Indeed, I think teenagers can improve their creating ability by using Technology devices today. 

Finally, from what has been discussed above, I can make a conclusion that Technology definitely help children to be more creative than we were in the past, because it allows them to learn more from famous artists and improve themselves by posting their work online.

426 words

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https://toefl.kmf.com/exam/write/153452867630078044/617cpj

我注意到这篇作文最大的特色是副词很多，在文章斜体+下划线给标注出来了，所以文章起承转折顺序很好，只是有几个重复使用了，有没有高级一点的都可以。

就以上两篇吧，本来准备了三篇的，但是第三篇细读之下才发现完全跟主题不相关，真不知道考满分怎么把它列为满分作文的。

下面进入正题。

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Radiation pressure from their internal heat was eventually fingered as the culprit. In physics as in the rest of life, if it sounds too good to be true, it almost always is.

finger:  tell the police that someone has committed a crime

这个词常见释义是名词手指，做动词用一个意思是用手指触摸，另一个是非正式用法，揭发罪行

culprit 是个好词，罪行，引申为原因，the culprit for

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I have always maintained that my primary goal is to entertain, not educate or enlighten. If the latter two objectives happen along the way, that's a bonus.

啊这句话特别好，因为姿态很低。

就像我现在写作，英语句型专栏一方面是为了应对考试，一方面是对读过的东西简单整理，再远一点是有读书就有写作，没人看也要继续呀，因为不能不学习，如果有人看的话并有所收获，那就是额外的bonus了。

entertain, educate, enlighten 这三个动词押头韵，特别好。

▁▂▃▅▆ ▊¶/C〓

In1979, soon after the country began rolling out Deng Xiaoping's economic reforms, a small group of artists mounted an unofficial exhibition on the park railings directly opposite the National Art Museum of China.

学会一门外语，一方面是对母语者的陈词滥调用另一种方式表达（所以你不会觉得恶心）， 一方面是看看在其他语言里是使用什么样的东西（所以你会觉得好奇）。

roll out the reforms:  introduce a new product or service 

▁▂▃▅▆ ▊◆/D〓

Today, the debate is lively. 

Speech leaves no fossils. 

In much the same way, Gould thought, big brains and increased intelligence were the original feature. 

中间这句话，说它特别好，其实翻译成中文，感觉有点莫名其妙，这就是文化差异吧。

in much the same way = by the same token

▁▂▃▅▆ ▊★/E〓

One fruitful avenue of research is what elements of language are shared by humankind's animal cousins.

一种对多的表达方式

其他还有：

- a wealth of 

- amounts of

- a lot of 

- mountains of 

- billions of 

- abundant

今日总结：

【1】be fingered as

【2】enter, not educate or enlighten

【3】roll out the reforms

【4】Speech leaves no fossils.

【5】One fruitful avenue of research 

一整本2016年11月26日至12月2日的经济学人杂志所有标注句型已经整理完毕，刚好这是第20篇，应该没有第二个人全部看完的，我写完了当然也算是看完。明天抽取一下好用句型，还有精彩句子，做个总结，刚好三周，完美！

如有错误，感谢指出。

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