析经济学人，习高分作文/15

做学生就多考分，做成人就多挣钱，这样尊严才可以多一点。

——我离托福考试只剩11天。

周二早上好，眼看考试日期临近，但我明显准备不够充分，心里说急表面却也自得，心里若说无所谓有时候表面上能跟自己急半天。

有点崩溃。

这一期来看一下实战写作，我前二周练的作文，今天重新修改下，发过来，我再读时觉得不恰当或者发现错误的地方会标注出来。

TPO 02 Independent Writing

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Always to tell the truth is the most important consideration in any relation.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

这是我单独练习所写的第一篇作文，不限时，但是当时也写不下去了，因为没有好的思路，现在分析起来是之前没有列好提纲，句型找了一堆但是记忆不深，脑袋一片空白，所以最后就参考了网上的范文。

Chief among the considerations put forward in any relationship between people, some of us may believe, is always to tell the truth. Rather than just supporting to be absolutely honest, I tend to take precedence on a case-by-case basis.

Start with honesty. One is thought to be reliable and could win respect easily while interacting with others in this way, which is essential to make and maintain any relationship. So as to establish the personal or commercial brand, potential partners will decide to choose if to cooperate in a long term based on your credibility.  Otherwise, even if one could temporarily recruit some to found a company together in business, chances are high that he or she, with constant untrue words and fake actions filling in mouths for personal benefits, will surely end up being exposed and labelled as the dishonest. Actually, with all lies filled in the mouth, one can never harvest a happy ending.

Next comes the role of kindness. The negative sides of telling everything you know outweigh the positive ones mentioned above when it comes to the choice between right and kind. If a friend had worn a newly purchased jeans on his birthday and proudly asked you weather it was a worthy buy, for instance, would you like to talk to him about how you really think about this and spoil his birthday party, then breaking up with him? Unarguably, to hide (entirely or partially) the truth in some situations can be quite handy indeed for the sake of avoiding confrontations and disputes.（These above sentences are adapted from the Internet) But the same cannot be said of telling a lie. Here we just say some sweet words in order to make our friend happy. Therefore, under this circumstance, I would prefer to be kinder than necessary. Be kind to concede part of the truth is not mutually exclusive with rightness. 

Should everyone speak of what he or she thinks is right, people might get angry and fight all day. We all hate betray and advocate to seek the truth, but occasionally, be it flexible in treating others, which does not mean deceiving others, this would let us enjoy more pleasure.

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Jul 28th 2018 | Friendship | 358 words

现在整体感觉仍旧把握不好某些表达是否准确，但是大体的框架就是这样的，句型已经标注出来了，接下来看下从网上找的另几个版本的，比较好的表达我同样会标注。

ONE：

“Each coin has two sides.” This old saying clearly shows that when faced make a decision, generally, you will have advantages coupled with disadvantages. Always telling the truth - one of the most debated topic over the ages - is just one side of the coin. That is why some people prefer not to tell the truth due to diminish the most of unwilling effects on their relationships. But others, in contrast, agree with the statement and believe that being frank is the basis of any relationship. As far as I’m concerned, I would strongly agree with this statement. I will elaborate my arguments in the next paragraphs.

To begin with, when you are not always frank in a relationship, it can force you to keep telling the lie more and more. In other words, whenever you want to talk about something related to your previous lie, you have to make another story. I mean,  you tell the first lie and then another one and after a while you admit that not aware of an infinite chain of lies. As an illustration, if you take a look at the most marriage lives that lead to the divorce, couples usually doubt on each other as the result of not telling the truth. Up to a point, I definitely prefer not being worried about the consistency of the stories that I have made before or have to make in the future.

Afterward, some people believe that in a relationship to tell a white lie in order not to make their partners annoyed, is a good idea. I would rather not agree with that because it gradually would become your personality. Even though, you tell a lie to make another feel happy, in a long period of time you learn not to tell the truth because of its benefits. In a like manner, this behavior contradicts with one of the key criteria in any relationship, begin committedly. I remember at the beginning of my marriage life, I was so strange and annoying to my wife because of frankly speaking. Fortunately, after a while, she considered it commitment and now we totally trust each other. As a point, dealing with some temporary problems can lead to a steady relationship even without white lies.

We all have heard a lot an old proverb that says “Honesty is the best policy”, I think it can always work even though has some deficiencies. Actually, dealing with unimportant or temporary problems helps you to have a permanent relationship. All in all, we can safely draw the conclusion that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship.

这篇相同词汇用得太多，tell, make, 有点像叙家常.....

TWO:

Ever since the development of human civilization, perpetual requirement about truth when we contacted with others has accompanied us all along the journey. It is the telling the truth that is regarded as a basic characteristic of mankind. Some people think that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. As far as I am concerned, I generally disagree with it.

Admittedly, people who tell the truth could get more reliance and popularity among his or her social circles since truth always means sincere. Some people lie in order to achieve their goals or even want to destroy other's benefits. Those kinds of people are considered as selfish guys. If a person hides the information or even tell the lie, other people would avoid to contact (contacting) with them let along make (making) friends with them. According to a survey conducted by a famous university, the most important factor people consider and choose to make a friend, partner or other close relationships is the sincerer (X this sentence is wrong). Without it, relationship wouldn't be built up or last a long time.

However, there are some cases require (requiring) us making a white lie which means telling a lie with a good will in order to 【删去】 achieve a better consequence【搭配不当】. Life abounds such examples. Doctors, for instance, shouldn't tell the true sereverity about the illness to their patients if it is too severe that might affect the cure. Or, some parents would hide their upset and show a happy mood to their children. Once talking about the difficulties, parents might just say "everything is all right" , no matter what the real situation is. For protecting the clients' or friends' benefits, people would and should keep the secret and tell a lie under the specific situation.

Moreover, it is impossible to tell the truth all the time. As a warranted study has shown, people, including both men and women 【删去】 and no matter what profession he or she has, would tell lies everyday.  When receiving an invitation about having meal together, people may be refused by the excuse of "not hungry at all" while they have some things to do with and are unwilling to make others upset. It is human's nature to tell lies. How people struggle with the nature! Therefore, since everyone would tell lies everyday, it is no absolute relationship between the insincere and telling the lies. Under the basic principles, people could tell some lies and would not avoid to tell 【动名词】 the lies.

In sum, since white lies are essential in some circumstances and people wouldn't rebel the nature of lying, it is unrealistic to consider telling the truth as the most important factor in any relationship between people. Of course, we hope that people we contact could be honest. Hence, we might require others and ourselves be honest basically and telling the lie without breaking the primarily principles in urgent situations.

整篇文章读得很奇怪，开头气势磅礴，第三句开始就超级简单了，后面连篇累牍，还许多基础错误，有几处错误修改了下。

THREE:

Different people hold distinct views when it comes to whether telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. If I had to make a decision, I would not go with the idea that telling the truth always is the most important consideration between people. 

First of all, some people are not willing to hear the truth that will make them unhappy or scared. For example, my friend got a serious disease, so he was not expected to live much longer. In order to make him live more happily in the rest of his life, I did not tell him real truth about his disease. There is no better example to showcase than this. 【例子缺乏细节显得不真实，朋友不知而你却知，难道你恰巧是诊断出朋友疾病的医生】

However, there are skeptics.  Some people think that people who do not tell the truth can not be trusted, and their relationship could be destroyed. However, if people heard the truth, they would become more frustrated and do something harmful to their bodies. 

Another important fact that I’d like to point out here is that getting along with people happily is the most important consideration between people for any relationship. For instance, one day, I arranged a wedding proposal for my girlfriend in the hospital, but I did not tell her beforehand. When she was working in the hospital, she heard that I had gotten in a terrible car accident and needed a surgery. However, she finally found the accident was not a real thing, and she was a little angry. In spite of the joke, the wedding proposal was an unforgettable experience for her. Therefore, I considered that always telling the truth is not the most important consideration in any relationship between people.

To sum up, on the basis of the reasons presented above, which correlate with each other to generate an integrated and complete argument, we have no reason to doubt that I disagree  that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.

本篇其实更不堪入目，这里是网站上别人已经帮原作者修改过的，但大部分只是提了意见，大刀阔斧地修改也显得没有礼貌，中毒已深病入膏肓。

FOUR:

Nothing could be more concrete about truth than the statement that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship. Yes, truth is the utmost crucial fabric of any relationship. I wholeheartedly believe that it is so important to tell the truth in any relationship because truth is the essence of any relationship.

To start with, when one goes along and grow along in one’s relationship, it is vitally crucial to be able to tell the truth, even if one thinks it is going to hurt the other one. The temporary sufferings of the truth can far outweigh the long and drawn out subtle agony of living in a lie. Also, you belittle your partner when you do not tell her the truth. A relationship goes hand in hand with being able to tell the truth. Telling lie, on the other hand, erodes the relation that cannot be recovered. For example, a friend of mine had an affair with the prettiest girl I have ever seen. But he was totally chameleon in his relationship. He has another secret affair and he was continuously telling lie to both of them. One day, eventually, he lost both of them and he felt like he had beenleft high and dry.

Again, trust is an essential ingredient of a relationship. Trust can be built on long practice of truth, but it can be broken just with a lie, and there is a possibility it may not be attained back. When a man tells a lie to his partner regardless of its reasons, it is natural to feel deceived. For many people, any kind of deceit is treated as deal breaker. For example, my last business partner lied to me about a simple matter, but I felt he may lie further and I could be deceived by him at any moment. Thereby, I ended the joint venture with him.

In conclusion, the bottom line is truth streamlines the relationship and keeps it evergreen. In other words, a single lie, even, can ruin an intimate relationship. That is why, truth always matters in any sort of relationship.

文章开头句式繁杂，句中遣词足显作者深厚功底，态度不卑不亢，通篇没有任何错误，暂时让我望尘莫及。

FIVE:

In real life, sometimes people tell the lie to reach some particular purposes, for example doctor tell a lie about the health to patients to help them calm down. Therefore, they will be easier in mental status to heal disease faster. However, in my opinion, I strongly agree with statement that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.

First, honest are the most important aspects of any relationship. To be clearer, relationship is based on the truth. People make friends with others because they believe in that person. Therefore, if a person always tells the truth, he or she will get faith from others and does every task in life easier. For example, my brother who is always honest in life, from learning to work, he gets trust from others. Last year, when he built his own company, many people trusted him and lent him money in order to help him. Hence, telling truth will help people.

Second, the truth makes people determine clear troubles or difficulties. When a hardship comes, some people think that telling not true or a different story will help reduce the seriousness of trouble. In fact, it is opposite. When I get into trouble, if someone tells me clear about my circumstance I have, it will be much easier for me to solve. I can determine clearly what I need to do, or how much I have to try to overcome hardship. Personally, telling the truth makes overcome trouble easier.

Third, telling the truth helps you have a good mental health. It is obvious that when you tell the lie with others, sometimes you will regret about with what you said. Therefore, telling the truth means you will not have to care about what you had said. Whatever you say, it is the truth. For example, when I was in school before, I got some low marks with subjects and told a lie with my mother. After that, I still got low marks and regretted with what I said. After toelling her the truth, everything is different; I felt so happy and got higher score. To be honest, telling the truth even help you become a better person.

In conclusion, with some reasons such as get the truth of every people, and easier to overcome sorrow, and make me become better, I strongly believe that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.

整篇文章亮点不多，但逻辑衔接恰当，小错误有些多，我已经修正，多为介词冠词语法错误，英语功底不扎实。

SIX:

One of the most severe dilemmas that every one face with in life is whether to tell the truth or lie in every-day-life situations. As tempting as it is, telling a lie is not only a moral question, but also, in the long run, hurts relationships between people; therefore, I believe we’d better tell the truth in our important relationships.

Telling the truth is not always rewarding. People naturally make mistakes and therefore they sometimes need to cover it somehow. One of the most frequently used tools is telling lies to others, trying to deny our mistakes. This approach may sometimes work successfully in order to save our relationships with each other.

Aside from the point I made above, one cannot oversee the fact that not telling the truth may ruin our relationships. We usually tend to make friends with  people who tell us the truth, i.e, we can not develop a relationship with people who we think they lie to us because the main core of a relationship is being able to trust each other. Since we cannot trust people who lie to us, we do not start a relationship with people who we believe to be lairs.

Another point that worths to be mentioned is that telling is not a good approach especially in the long run. Telling a simple lie sometimes leads to telling a chain of lies which are aimed to cover the very first lie. The more we lie, the higher the chance of getting caught by our friends is.  Therefore if we are going to develop a long-term relationship with someone, it is sensible not to  start a lie because it might result in a series of lies which eventually will be discovered by our friend.

In a word, owing to aforementioned causes and elucidations described above, it appears to be reasonable to draw the well-founded conclusion that telling the truth is an important issue in order to make a robust relationship, especially a long-term one.

整篇文章很平淡，其中错误比较少，四五个吧，论证过程没有具体例子，说理太多，模板更是显得拖沓。

读了七篇作文，如果你读完的话，如果有人读的话，是不是很累很烦了...那下面积累点句型吧，这个时候要注意基本英语知识了，句型的正确应用依赖于最基本的知识技能。

英语这东西学会了，就像骑自行车，玩手机，爱游泳，会开车一样，显得非常方便，那就自然每天或者至少每周都要去运用了，因为掌握另一门语言是很快乐的事情。

如果你没有见识过更大的世界，你是不知道那种世界有多么超乎你的想象。

懒得费太多口沫说了，无法叫醒装睡的人，现在的时间和精力暂时只允许我花费在自认为值得的事情和人物上。

下面进入正题。

▁▂▃▅▆ ▊▷/A〓

Thus began Scotland's North Sea oil boom. Steak houses, cigars and words like roughneck and roustabout took hold. 

roughneck: someone who behaves in a rude or threatening way

roustabout: a traditional term used to describe a fairground or circus worker, which is now used in the oil industry.

这两句话简直太美妙了。

前面是前倒装，后面是后倒装。

Thus begin ................

....................take hold.

另外，roughneck 和 roustabout  这两个词读起来朗朗上口。

▁▂▃▅▆ ▊§/B〓

Since those days oil has brought both boom and bust to Aberdeen, but never before the sense of despondency that grips the city today.

despondency: sadness and unhappiness

 dejection, depression, despair, desperation, gloom, low spirits, melancholy, misery, sadness

boom: a sudden major increase in trade, profits etc in a particular country or region

bust: a company or organization that is bust has lost all its money and can no longer continue to operate

这两个又是同一字母开头的对应名词，意思相反，平仄相对，简直再好不过了。

▁▂▃▅▆ ▊¶/C〓

They accept that high-cost oil regions like Scotland's North Sea, Canada's oil sands and the Russian Arctic may be in trouble, but expect at least one more oil boom, born from the ashes of today's bust, because there has been so little investment in the past two years to open up new sources of supply.

同样的两个词，又是用得出神入化。

+- born from the ashes of today's bust

不多说了，这么地道的高级表达，先背下来吧，看以后合适时机该出手时就出手。

▁▂▃▅▆ ▊◆/D〓

The biggest turmoil would be felt in oil-dependent developing countries. As Jason Bordoff, of Columbia University's Centre on Global Energy Policy, notes, the social stresses now evident in budget-strapped petrostates such as Venezuela and Nigeria are a hint of things to come.

turmoil:  a state of excitement or uncontrolled activity

hint:   something that you say to show what you are thinking or feeling, without saying it directly

其实这两个短语很简单，但是我们一般想不到去这样组合，只有见的多了，每次都积累下来，熟能生巧，体会其中微妙含义，下次遇到相似情况就能直接用上了，毕竟我们不是莎士比亚，没有那么多资本妄自造词。

▁▂▃▅▆ ▊★/E〓

It's living proof that history never ends, says Juri Luik, a former Estonian foreign and defence minister. "We have to explain who we are all over again."

这是二个好微妙的短语碰到一起了，如此简单，却有难以运用。

今日总结：

【1】Thus begin ...............

            ............... take hold.

【2】bring both boom and bust to 

【3】but expect at least one more boom, born from the ashes of today's bust

【4】The biggest tumoil would be felt in ...

            ............ are a hint of things to come

【5】It's living proof that history never ends.

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